esayitch 2025-07-07 16:46:31

Great story, great writing.

shadowfals 2025-07-08 10:50:03

Excellently creepy.

nitrousnuggy 2025-07-09 09:15:06

This is a really neat, contemporary take on a more out there sci-fi concept, I think you tapped into something deeply uncomfortable but also real. The way the narrator describes Rosie's body matching how someone would describe the gaming PC they built is brilliant. I think the story could have used more exploration into Frederick's character and psychology, a few breadcrumbs about his personality and how his life got to this point. As is he's just kind of a hopelessly pathetic guy which leaves me wanting for a little more. But if your main goal was to write a little vignette that's as uncomfortable as possible, you succeeded with flying colors. Well done :)

GerritTime 2025-07-13 17:48:07

This is disgusting.

I read the first version of this and gave you feedback on it, and I'm glad you made it even worse
I'm desensitized from reading the first draft that I only said "oh my god" three times this read, which I believe is evidence that I regret caving into my curiosity for the second time (that is a good thing, by the way)

I love how by going all in on just having the robot girl, you turned the story into an interesting showcase of masturbation and porn addiction
I'd genuinely love seeing this be expanded further, I think there's enough potential here to continue this story, perhaps even turning it into a novel. That way your readers can be horrified at this guy for at least 100 pages in the best case scenario, depending on if you want to grant your audience any mercy

On a serious note though, you wrote something really good here, I love that I hate this

DannyGoodShirt 2025-07-15 00:21:08

Great read! I could see it as part of a horror movie.